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Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2483] Mon, 29 June 2009 03:02 Go to next message
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Here's the thread for any feedback about Chapter Fourteen. Please put the page number and author of the post in your comment.

Both praise and constructive criticism are welcome.

[Updated on: Tue, 28 July 2009 04:52]

Dianne Tracy Love! Jeff Tracy - my IR:TNP OTP!
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2580 is a reply to message #2483 ] Tue, 28 July 2009 02:31 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Really enjoyed the Tracy family watching the Rose Bowl posts by Tikatu. I loved imagining what materials and colors the floats were. And the Michael Phelps cameo was priceless. I especially enjoyed the two reporters. Wink

I also have been enjoying the posts featuring the Crenshaw family. Can't wait to "meet" them.

98% pure evil...and loving every minute of it! Luke Morel Rommel Elise Collins
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2617 is a reply to message #2580 ] Sun, 09 August 2009 20:43 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Post #2616 by Icarus...

I loved seeing Vince lay the rules to Aaron. Poor kid thought he had it made on his own, didn't expect to have any rules! Go, Vince! Looking forward to seeing both of them get adjusted, Aaron to becoming an adult, and his parents to letting him go. Keep up the great work!

98% pure evil...and loving every minute of it! Luke Morel Rommel Elise Collins
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2651 is a reply to message #2483 ] Mon, 31 August 2009 01:28 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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#2649 by starrynebula and ArtisticRainey

I loved the interaction between Cassie and Dom here. It felt very natural, very true to both characters and brought some things back into play (Matthew, his children, his divorce, Alex, Mags, Cassie's brothers, her grandmother, her parents) that are important in the lives of these characters but might be overlooked in the overall scheme of things. Excellent post all the way through. Good set up for things to come.

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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2676 is a reply to message #2651 ] Sun, 13 September 2009 15:25 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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#2675 by Tikatu

Liked seeing Scott playing big brother and seeing some interaction among the Tracys.The guessing game with the agents was a good humorous balance for the following conversation about Alan and Nikki's relationship.

Quote:

“Says the man with no girlfriend."

Laughing my *** off
Glad I finished my tea before I got to that line!

Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but rising every time we fall. -Confucius Cassandra Kishi
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2684 is a reply to message #2483 ] Tue, 15 September 2009 17:42 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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#2682 by Tikatu!

I loved seeing Scott with the younger ones. He has the patience of Job trying to teach them tennis when you know they'd much rather be at the beach! And the "shot!" Poor guy...

98% pure evil...and loving every minute of it! Luke Morel Rommel Elise Collins
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2737 is a reply to message #2483 ] Sat, 10 October 2009 13:15 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Hello, everyone!

Hey, is there a romance developing between Scott and Cassie?

Good luck, all of you.
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2799 is a reply to message #2737 ] Thu, 29 October 2009 01:27 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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message 2797 + 2798 by lillehafrue . . .

Not good at writing romance, huh? Could've fooled me. Nice job! Enjoyed reading both of the posts. Like the fact that it was Elise 'pushing the action' so to speak in the first post.

Think we need some thoughts from Elise after Virgil finally goes back to the Villa now though!

Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but rising every time we fall. -Confucius Cassandra Kishi
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2800 is a reply to message #2483 ] Sun, 01 November 2009 11:00 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Oh dear oh dear oh dear. I wonder what Valentine's Day will be like?

Poor Alan. Is he going to visit Nikki soon?

What did John mean when he said "Don't I wish!" in #2738?
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2811 is a reply to message #2483 ] Sun, 22 November 2009 12:08 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Post #2805

Susanmartha, I really liked 'International Rescue: The Authoritative History'. Could you do a post of Luke reading the book? It would be hilarious, I'm sure!

Tanning beds in Antarctica...
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2812 is a reply to message #2811 ] Mon, 23 November 2009 07:42 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Maybe he could pass it around this island when he gets back. Gordon's comments might be really wonderful
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2865 is a reply to message #2483 ] Thu, 07 January 2010 00:26 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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#2864 By Rain

And so it begins...can't wait to read more!

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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2929 is a reply to message #2865 ] Wed, 03 March 2010 23:43 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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#2928 by Dianne

This is a wonderfully written piece. I love all the descriptions and the setting seemed so real that I could have been riding in the SUV with them! Great job!

[Updated on: Wed, 03 March 2010 23:51]

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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2939 is a reply to message #2929 ] Fri, 05 March 2010 14:13 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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2932 by Robin and Rain

Nice job there guys! It's a good insight to both characters and a good follow up to the rescue posts. Perfect balance of a little humor to lighten it up!

Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but rising every time we fall. -Confucius Cassandra Kishi
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #2945 is a reply to message #2483 ] Sat, 13 March 2010 16:58 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Hooray! The Tracy's are in my neck of the woods. Now if we could only get Scott to visit... Wink

Seriously, very well done, Dianne. I've eaten there myself and can picture almost exactly where they're sitting. And yes Jeff, you do look smashing in a tux. It's no picnic for us women either! I was in a gold gown and heels!

Looking forward to more posts with them visiting "me".

98% pure evil...and loving every minute of it! Luke Morel Rommel Elise Collins
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #3000 is a reply to message #2483 ] Fri, 28 May 2010 00:07 Go to previous messageGo to next message
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Post 2999 by starrynebula

I really like how Scott tries to reason with himself here. He's realized that he's become attached to Cassie, but isn't ready to admit to it. His rationalization is very much Scott, and starrynebula has caught his inner voice very well.

Excellent job!

Dianne Tracy Love! Jeff Tracy - my IR:TNP OTP!
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Re: Chapter Fourteen feedback [message #3001 is a reply to message #3000 ] Fri, 28 May 2010 20:58 Go to previous message
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Post 2999 by starrynebula

Really enjoyed reading this! I think you're doing a good job with developing this relationship and can't wait to see where you take it from here!
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